Fun time with famliy

Room 10 - Term 4/2019  Writing Sheet

Name:Hayden __________________________________ Year: 5_______

Week : 5_______________ Date: 12/11/19_______

Soon as we reached the beautiful park I could see kids going down the slippery
slide kids running with joy.The moment my foot touched it crazy with
excitement I didn't know if I wanted to go on the slide monkey bars.

Sooner or later my friend arrived I played rugby with them POW! I kicked the
ball as high as I can TRY! And the crowd goes wild ahhhh! I felt like I was
Richie Mccaw. When we won it felt like I just won the player of the year.

I walked my way to my family to have a delicious lunch. The moment I looked
at that beautiful and delicious chicken sandwich with sweet and sour sauce
that looked crispy and soft chicken in the inside rich sauce all over it.I walked
home jumping with excitement after a tasty looking sandwich that was one of
the best of my life.      

The vege car by Pete Stevens School journal part 3 number 1 2007

      The vege car by Pete Stevens 

School journal part 3 number 1 2007

LITERAL

The McDonald family live in Auckland

You can smell the vege car

James Nui was the first to make a vege car

The car took 1 month to build

INFERENTIAL

The vege is famous 

James Nui keeps secrets 

Petrol in new Zealand is cheap 

James Nui is famous around the world

EVALUATIVE

James is a genius

They should not have received a speeding ticket 

Buying petrol from helping the world

Coming first

Room 10 - Term 4/2019  Writing Sheet

Name: _Hayden _________________________________ Year:5 _______

Week : _3______________ Date: 29/10/19_______

GO! I ran off with the speed of a lion my goal was to pass the school finish line.
I could already feel my body giving up but I wanted to push myself to the finish
line.I knew everybody wanted to cross the finish line that was a big challenge.

I was coming 3rd and my first lap wasn't finish so I ran like I was the fastest
man on the planet.First lap was done and i wanted to come 1st so bad it was
like I was going to pop like a balloon.SWISH! I am coming 2nd place now I
just need to come first it was like everybody was shouting my name.I felt like
usain bolt 

Immediately I could see the finish line but I was still far away.My legs felt like
they were broken.I just want to give up but I wanted people to know that I was
fast so I kept on going Im first it was like there was a party inside my brain.

I looked back shocked that 2nd place was chasing me like I was his dinner.
Moments away from the finish line.my foot cross the line it felt like I just scored
a goal in a professional soccer game and everybody goes wild.To me it was
a dream come true. 

I can't wait for next year's cross country I can tell it . 

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Rainbows end

  Rainbows end

When I got inside the gate at Rainbows End, I  could already see the cool
and amazing rides.  I liked the look of the Power Surge and I knew I was
going to have a lot of fun on it. The look of the Stratosfear sent shivers up
my spine and I knew I was  never going to go on it. I loved the thrilling Roller
Coaster and I couldn't wait to go on it. 

 While we waited at the back of the line, my mum gave us a small lolly each
to eat.  Finally it was my turn. I got in but my sister was under the height limit,
so I went on alone and I still had fun. When I got off the ride I felt very dizzy. 
It was like I was about to explode like a balloon. 

Then I sat down for a while to get my brain ready for the next ride. Once I was
feeling better,  I got up and my sister asked if we could go to Kids Kingdom
but I wanted to go on the Fear Fall.   My mum decided to go with to take my
sister and my brother to the Kids Kingdom while I went on the Fear Fall. I was a bit scared so my dad  went with me on the scary fear fall. I felt scared and
I almost vomited while on the fear fall.

When I got off the Fear Fall, I  wanted to go home because I was feeling very
sick.  My dad called my mum and sister and they decided to take us back
home because I was feeling sick.  Although I had a lot of fun at Rainbows
End, I felt bad because my sister had to go back home with us. 

 I hope to go  back to Rainbows End again so that my sister can  have more
fun with me on the amazing rides.